Home

Previous Entry | Next Entry

Fragile Deleted Scene

  • Jun. 8th, 2009 at 4:47 PM

So on the USB bands I fling at you during events, I have these excerpts (along w bunches of other stuff).  The contents aren't to be posted in public until Summer Solstice.  That's the rule, but . . . well, I'm in a mood.  . . which means that I'm posting one early :)

UNDER THE CUT in case you haven't read FRAGILE &/or just don't wanna see it. . .

CUT from Fragile Eternity

NOTES: I cut this because it slowed the pacing.   This is a “it did happen but it’s not in your book” excerpt.

 

Donia was out walking when Seth found her.

"I wouldn't pursue this path.  I gave my mortality for him . . ." She let her words drift away, but the meaning was still there as if she'd pronounced it.

"She needs me."

"It's a mistake."

Seth paused, weighing his words, hoping he wasn’t telling Donia anything she didn't already know. He toyed with the ring in his lower lip as he tried to formulate the right words.  "They grow closer every day. He has some sort of pull over her . . ."  

            "That is to be expected," she murmured, gently.

            "I don't want to lose her."

            "Sometimes what we are determines who we can love . . ." Her voice didn't reveal any change in emotion, but a shard of ice glinted in her eye, a frozen tear unshed.

            "If I were faery--"

            "I won't help you make this mistake, Seth."

            "Even if it helped you keep her from him?" Seth watched Donia as she weighed her words.  She was every bit as terrifying as Niall could be, but the Winter Queen was calculating in a way that Niall seemed to lack . . . in a way that reminded him of the last Winter Queen.  He shivered at the memory of icicles driving into his skin. 

            It was as if Beira's visage lay atop Donia's face when she asked, "Would you throw yourself on my mercy for her?"

            "You know that answer."

Donia sighed. "I do.  It’s the same answer Keenan would give, Seth."





Comments

( 15 comments — Leave a comment )
[info]beautyxinsainty wrote:
Jun. 8th, 2009 08:55 pm (UTC)
i like! amazing as alway.
[info]iingenious wrote:
Jun. 8th, 2009 08:58 pm (UTC)
Thank you! A little heartbreaking, but I'm glad you shared :D
(Anonymous) wrote:
Jun. 8th, 2009 09:00 pm (UTC)
Amazing!
It's wonderful, I love it!
[info]dyakilin wrote:
Jun. 8th, 2009 09:16 pm (UTC)
*blub blub*
I like it. <3
[info]kathleenfoucart wrote:
Jun. 8th, 2009 10:12 pm (UTC)
Wow. Why deleted? Fantastic last line.
[info]melissa_writing wrote:
Jun. 9th, 2009 03:11 am (UTC)
Thx :) I liked the last line too, but it slowed the pacing, and the data in it was conveyed elsewise.
[info]brittneydaylee wrote:
Jun. 9th, 2009 01:42 am (UTC)
aawww...
very nice.
(Anonymous) wrote:
Jun. 9th, 2009 02:48 am (UTC)
Great
It was a great scene, too bad it was deleted.
[info]gabsterart wrote:
Jun. 9th, 2009 05:45 am (UTC)
Brilliant moment! I could really sense Donia, her emotion and the beats in the conversation. Thank you for sharing! Love your work :D
[info]randrblueivy wrote:
Jun. 9th, 2009 02:25 pm (UTC)
What a great scene!
It's a shame that was taken out - it's a fantastic scene for Donia.

Thanks so much for sharing!
[info]niamhaevalnimue wrote:
Jun. 9th, 2009 02:45 pm (UTC)
as when I read the book, my mind is blown away by Seth's devotion to Aisling. excellent.
(Anonymous) wrote:
Jun. 10th, 2009 06:53 pm (UTC)
i love it
im glad that i read that because i never would of know that! it's really good!
[info]hailiesalvatore wrote:
Jul. 23rd, 2009 07:08 pm (UTC)
omygod!!! this is cool! I luv ur books and this shoulda been in it!!
[info]lovetolive_1915 wrote:
Aug. 9th, 2009 11:14 pm (UTC)
simply divine
For one I love you series.
I love this scene, it shows Seth's devotion to Aislinn, Donia's understaning, and it's just something that gives us a larger understanding of Seth's choice, why he did what he did. It's a great piece, and it is to bad it was deleted.
Your stories are simply divine, and I can not wait until your next novel comes to stores.
[info]lunasol28 wrote:
Oct. 28th, 2009 04:57 am (UTC)
I like this because it points out how Keenan's love isn't all that different from Seth's. They would both risk losing her if it means keeping her safe. Also liked that Donia is the one who says this because she knows Keenan the best. She knows that the love Keenan feels toward Aislinn sprang from the fact that she's his Queen but she is also resigned to the fact that it has become more than that.
( 15 comments — Leave a comment )